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The average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparsions where relevant.

Introduction

My Answer

The pie charts show comparisons about the average household expenditures between japan and malaysia in the year 2010, at perentages with 5 categories.

Answer

The two pie charts show the proportion of money spent on various household necessities in Malaysia and Japan in 2010. The date is calibrated in percentage.

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Expenditures 를 proportion of money spent 로 표현 

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necessity - 필수품

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is calibrated in percentage. 

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“비교를 보여주고 있다” 가 좋은 표현인지는 모르겠음. 내가 비교 해야 하는 거지, 차트가 비교 중인 것은 아닌 듯.

General trend

My answer

Most percentage is housing and food at both of them. Also other goods and services is included more than a quarter. Expenditures by health care is the smallest factors in two countries.

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Overall, the data indicates that in both cases food, housing and other goods and services were the main expenses while, both countries spent least on health care.

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while, whereas, on the other hand - 반면에

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In the both cases - 양 쪽 케이스에서

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Spend least on N = 가장 적게 쓰다.

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Most of the percentages were taken by N

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In addition, other goods and services accounted for more than a quarter.

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차지하다 - account for

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The smallest comsumption 도 됬을 듯.

Body 1

My answer

In japan, without others goods and services, the biggest expenditures at household in 2010 is food and it is more than 50% to sum. Next bigger factors are housing and transport each 21%, 20%. Otherwise(반면에), spending to health care is only 6% among 100%.

Answer

It can be clearly seen from the chart, in Malaysia the greatest proportion of expenditure (34%) was on housing, while in Japan housing accounted for just 21% of the total. Followed by in Japan the greatest single expense was other goods and services at 29%, compared with 26% in Malaysia.

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Otherwise - 그렇지 않으면

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It can be clearly seen from the chart, phr

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21% of the total.

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Expense = expenditures ( 둘다 명사 사용 가능 )

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Followed by - 다음으로

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A phr at percent, compared with percent

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Combining the two, it is more than 50 percent. - 둘을 합치면 50%가 넘는다.

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The next largest(biggeset) factors.

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두 나라를 계속 비교하면서 써야 함!! 하나의 차트만 계속 하면 body 2에서 비교하기 힘들어짐!

Body 2

My answer

Spending in Malaysia also is that the health care is smallest factor by only 3%. 그에 비해, the vast majority expenditure is housing, at 34%. The transport is only 10%, and it is smaller than 10% more in japan. When the factor of food is compared, it is similar with in japan, each at 27% and 24%.

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Moreover, food came at second place in Japan, at 24%, while in Malaysia the actual proportion was higher (27%). In Japan another major expense was transport, at 20%, but this was much lower in Malaysia (10%). Surprisingly, in both countries the smallest percentage of expenditure was on health care.

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By comparison - 그에 비해

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contrastively- 대조적으로

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And 대신 moveover!

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N came at second place - n이 이등이다.

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Major N - 주요 N

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Much lower - 더 적다

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Surprisingly - 

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퍼센트는 항상 at p%.

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The vast majority of

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The small minority of, merely

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When comparing food consumption, it is similar to Japan by 24% to 28%.